October 28, 2021, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story that features a candy kitchen. You can interpret the phrase creatively or stick to the traditional. Is it sweet? Ironic? Any genre will do. Go where the prompt leads!
Candy-Coloured Rage – by Hugh W. Roberts
He loved everything about the house except the candy-coloured kitchen.
Moving through the rooms, Richard destroyed everything in his path, keeping the best until last. His fists did all the work like giant metal balls on the end of chains that swang and knocked down old buildings.
Upon reaching the candy-coloured kitchen, his rage and anger peaked. Moments later, silence surrounded the house until the sound of sobbing interrupted his discernment of achievement.
“What have you done?” sobbed his six-year-old sister.
“If Daddy won’t let me play with your dolls’ house, then nor can you,” a wide-eyed Richard yelled.
Richard first appeared in Edge Of Summer – another piece of flash fiction written for the 99-word flash fiction challenge.
Written for the 99-word flash fiction challenge hosted by Charli Mills at the Carrot Ranch. Click here to join in.
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38 thoughts on “Candy-Coloured Rage”
Wow. You totally had me twisted around for that one, Hugh. Great story and what a dramatic ending. His poor sister.
Yes, she was the innocent party in this piece of flash drama, Diana. I’m glad the twist got you.
Well don, Hugh. You had my imagination running through various scenarios but I still wasn’t prepared for the sad twist.
Thanks, Dan. I like it when my twists take readers by surprise.
Ouchee. Sounds like someone is feeling a bit wounded and needs to learn some control. 🙂 x
True, but I think the problem is not of his own making. But, back then, things were very different.
That’s a fact! 🙂
Oh dear. This is so sad. A new side to Richard. His poor sister. But maybe he just needs to be accepted for who he is. Perhaps anyone would be angry if not accepted.
I agree, Norah, especially when the person concerned is a child. But times have changed, and things are better these days.
I pleased to hear that, Hugh. 🙂
Oh, Hugh, the pain in this story is undeniable. You wrote it in such a clever way, that the sad twist was not what I expected, though I knew you’d explain the demolition.
Thanks, Charli. As I said to Rebecca, when I saw your prompt, my dyslexic mind took me in a completely different direction and away from the sweet store. I’m building a good picture of Richard in these pieces of flash. He’s defiantly the ‘unstable’ one.
Oh dear, poor little guy. Such big emotions represented so well, Hugh. It can feel like the destruction of a whole world when it’s all we know. What a clever take on the prompt!
Thanks, Rebecca. When I saw ‘Candy Kitchen’, I came straight out of the box with my dyslexic mind. I now use it to my advantage when writing rather than trying to hide it. It told me to write a piece about candy painted walls rather than a sweet store.
I love it Hugh. That’s such a fabulous way to view it. I’m autistic so I tend to take things literally. Charli mentioned a “quick draw” flash fiction activity she was running with her students and I thought they had to sketch out a quick something to write a flash piece on. Then there’s my ADHD, my mind runs faster than my fingers and it’s never a straight line. Keep drawing on that fantastic mind of yours Hugh, it’s creating beautiful things.
One of the best pieces of advice I’ve had about writing a story from a prompt is to ‘think outside of the box,’ Rebecca. My mind seems to do that anyway. Sometimes it can get me in real trouble, whereas other times, I’ve shocked people with what I’ve come up with.
I’m right with you there, Hugh. And the best responses are the ones that shock us.
Often, but not always, they’re the best kinds, I should say!
sounds like something my brother would do …
Hi Hugh, Bella suggested you maybe able to help me … my mac wont allow me to read downloaded PDF’s, or edit them … any clues would be greatly appreciated?
much thanks, kate
Hi Kate, I’ve had an email from Bella about your query. I’ll respond to the email with a link that gives details on reading and editing PDFs on a Mac.
got it thanks Hugh, fortunately Bella changed it into a format I can actually edit!
Is that what you call remodeling? 😊 Nicely done, Hugh!
I suppose so. I guess the dolls’ house can not be refitted and done up to his liking.
Oh, wow, truly a giant at work!
A giant in a dolls’ house, yes.
Right! Poor sister!
And she was the innocent party in this drama.
Little sisters can often only watch tragedy unfold – often, but not always 😈
Haha! I once painted my kitchen pink … not a good move. But at least my brother didn’t wreck it!
I’m glad to hear he never wrecked it. How long did the pink coloured kitchen last before you repainted?
Yep, you surprised me, too, Hugh! I was thinking how strong this guy must be then, oh! Love that imagination of yours!
Your comment got me chuckling, Terri. This twist only came to me yesterday. I almost missed the deadline, but glad it came to me.
Reminds me of the look on the therapist’s face when my son and I walked into his playroom, and I pointed out the doll house to my son…
I wish we could bottle those looks. They’d be worth a fortune in the future. I can imagine people sitting in theatres laughing their heads off as the film rolls.
This was excellent Hugh! You surprised me at the end. LOL! ❤
I’m glad that twist got you, Colleen. I love it when that happens to my readers.