Nightmare In Spring #flashfiction

July 15, 2021, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story using the word meltdown. You can use it to describe an event or emotional reaction. You can create a new meaning or explore the word origin. You can Go where the prompt leads!

Nightmare In Spring – by Hugh W. Roberts

For the last four weeks, George was in meltdown.

Not only had somebody given him two new black eyes, but a stranger had swapped his favourite yellow scarf for an orange one. George hated the colour orange; it didn’t suit him.

Last week, Judy, who he thought was his best friend, had given him a floppy, wide-brimmed summer hat. What on earth was she thinking? What next? Sunglasses?

Now, this week, he was in total meltdown and having a nightmare time of it all. The beginning of spring was not the best time of the year for a snowman.


Image of a woman holding her face in her hands while having a meltdown
Image Credit: Charli Mills

Written for the 99-word flash fiction challenge hosted by Charli Mills at the Carrot Ranch. Click here to join in.

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52 thoughts on “Nightmare In Spring #flashfiction

  1. Wonderful twist Hugh. I found it interesting that a flash called ‘nightmare’ didn’t have the ‘scary’ twist we’re used to. Nice twist! ❤

  2. This story is super cute, Hugh. I’m linking it to the attendance roster for Story Chat this month. I would love to be able to write surprise endings like that. You’re a master. 🙂

    1. Thanks, Marsha. Have you ever tried writing surprise endings? I never thought I’d be able to write them – then I gave it a try and was rather surprised by the results.

      1. I like that, you were surprised by the results. I have tried a couple of times on Charli’s prompts, but they haven’t been superior. I don’t do it often enough, maybe, but it is not how I work. I can hardly keep a surprise – I’m just so anxious to see the reaction – like gifts for example. That if I buy a gift early, I want to rush it right over.

        1. I used to be like that with my blog posts. I’d write them and publish them straight away. Now I leave them at least 24 hours before going back to them and editing them. I’ve been amazed by the results. Some of my blog posts take at least 7 days to write and edit before pushing the ‘publish’ button.

        2. I don’t publish most of mine the day of either. I schedule them, one of my recent posts had 71 revisions. In fact it was Story Chat Summary which will come out on Tuesday. 71, Hugh!

  3. LOL!!! I was guessing someone was annoying their dog by dressing him up. Wrong!
    Great take on meltdown 🙂

  4. What an ending! You had me on the back-foot the whole way through. Doesn’t Judy know what he likes? How can she not?! Will this end their friendship?

    I never would’ve guessed that twist. I loved it. What a surprise. Thanks for that Hugh! Fabulous.

    1. I think Judy thought she was giving George exactly what he liked…because she liked it. Now he’s melted, their friendship has ended for another six months until the first snows of Autumn arrive.
      Thanks, Rebecca. Glad you enjoyed the short story of George’s meltdown.

  5. This was just good ole’ LOL funny, Hugh! You are the master of the twist although my eye wandered to the end! What a great flash fiction, with a fab first hook, making me picture a fussy man! You must add this to your next book!

    1. You checked the ending out first, Terri? Tut, tut. Then again, I recently wrote a post over on my column at the Carrot Ranch about reading endings first. It’s not such a bad thing.
      Glad you liked it. It came to me instantly when I saw the prompt.

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