January 9, 2019, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about a carried wife. Why is she being carried? Who is carrying? Pick a genre if you’d like and craft a memorable character. Go where the prompt leads!
While carrying his new wife over the threshold of the honeymoon suite, Doug’s eyes lit up at the size of the massive bed in front of him.
Those pillows were big enough to suffocate his new wife for cheating on him.
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Landing on the bed, Sophie looked at her new husband and wondered how long it would be before the spiked drink she had made Doug consume, would knock him out cold so she could spend the night with Mike, Doug’s best friend.
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Two floors below, Mike wondered which of the newlyweds would be joining him in bed tonight.
Written in response to the 99-word flash fiction challenge hosted by Charli Mills at the Carrot Ranch.
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Well done!
Thank you.
Brilliant last line! Interesting triangle. 🙂
Thanks, Debby. Maybe now it’s a broken triangle?
I’m thinking so! 🙂
Love it! I’m happy you are writing short stories again!
It’s been a long time since I last write a piece of flash fiction, Elizabeth. For some reason, I seemed to go off the boil with them. I’m bubbling away again now.
Oh, this is excellent Hugh. Really made me laugh! Who will it be?
Who indeed, Marje. Maybe neither of them?
I’d like to know who Mike ends up with too. 🙂
In these 99-word pieces of flash fiction, I like to leave it up to the reader to decide. Depending on Charli’s prompt next week, maybe we could find out.
I think it’s always good to leave a bit of mystery in your story.
Ha! Well done! That’s a Mike drop, of sorts.
I like what you say. From some of the other comments, I think you could be right.
I do love this Hugh, I wouldn’t worry about Mike, Hugh he had a tasty time with the waiter and waitress who bought him his late night snack. 😜💜
Good to see you carrying on the story, Willow. Whatever Mike got up to, I wonder if an awful shock awaits him?
Well we all know life never runs smoothly, especially when we are having fun. It usually sneaks up and bites you on the bum ! 🥴😁😁
Hugh, this is brilliant: not just the usual story of marital affairs and deceit but with an interesting twist. Great thinking outside of the box………or is that bed?
Thanks, Tim. My editor taught me to think outside of the box. Her advice seems to have stuck with me.
Oh this was fun, Hugh! Short and not so sweet!!
Thanks, Terri. A bit like a bowl of salty and sweet popcorn mix then?
Sick! More please!!
More on the way.
Superb, Hugh, though I hate to think what life experience brought that lot into your mind 😂
Now, that would be telling, wouldn’t it, Clive?
Aww, go on 😂
Dark, indeed!
Thanks, Bette.
Lol, nice twist!
Thank you.
This is just too awesome, Hugh 😂 🤣
Thank you. I’ve no idea where it came from. When I saw the prompt, I thought ‘no-way are you going to write a 99-word piece of flash fiction with that prompt, Hugh.’
Haha, you did awesome. I read a few takes, all good, but your take is the absolute winner for me. So smart!!
So kind. Thank you, Erika. That’s made my day.
I am very happy to hear that😊
Ooer! Definitely a long wait!
And he has to check-out of the hotel in the morning. Hopefully, before they discover the bodies of the newlyweds.
Ooooh! Implications!!!
Dark with a capital D, but funny … 🙂
I’m glad the humour of the situation has also come over in the story.
Good one, Hugh! Each part held a dark surprise.
Indeed, Janis. Mike has a long wait ahead of him.
That was great! Dark humor at its finest. 🙂
Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Only being allowed 99 words (no more, no less) is tough, so I’m happy the story came over.
The punch line was delightfully unexpected.
OMGosh, that’s funny-scary. I didn’t see where it was going. Good little story!
Thank you, Priscilla. It always pleases me when a reader didn’t see the ending coming.
Oh my, this is not a good start to a marriage, Hugh.
It’s a marriage that has probably already ended, Robbie. Mike has a long wait ahead of him.