Everybody has a chance, but it does depend on where you are at the time it appears. I only say that because I am sure I have seen some of the faces here, before. Like, for example, your face.
Now, as we watch the young child take her chance to join us, I will do all I can to make sure she makes it in time, but I need your help too.
What I have created now looms in front of her. If this had been happening a few years ago, I would have had full control over how long the porthole on our spaceship would remain open. Now, however, my power over my creation seems to be weakening.
Even though I know life has been cruel to this child, you’re not so sure, are you?
From what I have witnessed, this child will be a credit to both of us. And, as our world is dying, we need all the souls we can get to build our army.
“Run, child, run,” I shout, as she nears the opening. But you remain silent. Why?
We need her to help save our world. Don’t you see that?
My heart drops when I see the porthole begin to close. I can hear my followers behind me screaming, yet you remain silent. I hope the child makes it through in time.
With a mighty leap, she makes it through before it closes.
“Daddy,” she whispers, as she wraps her arms around my waist. I could tell she now felt safe.
“Now go, child, go do all the bad things you really meant to do when you were on that world. No more being good and trying to make yourself acceptable because of what others told you. The world you have just left was too cruel to you.”
As she looks up at me and smiles, I know she will not fail me.
“Thank you, Father. I always wanted to meet the Devil and come to Hell.”
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Written in response to the Monthly Speculative Fiction Writing Prompt, from Diana, at Myths of the Mirror. Click here for full details.
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Very unsusal POV you wrote this piece in. Created an odd ‘off-kilter’ feeling that was deliciously brought home by that dark twist. Great piece.
Thank you very much, Jessica. I’m glad you enjoyed it. It sat in my draft folder for a few weeks as I wasn’t quite sure about it. It seems to have gone down very well.
Oh don’t ever sit on something! Let it live!
This is a fun read! So twisted and unexpected. I love the imagination behind this. Lovely writing
Thank you so much. I’m glad you enjoyed reading it and liked the twist I gave it.
And then there’s that… Great, new twist!
Thanks, Kevin. I always enjoy giving my stories an unexpected twist.
Well, as they say… The Devil’s in the details!!! Ha
Really didn’t expect that ending. Nicely done!
Thank you. I’m always very happy to hear that the ending was unexpected.
Unexpected as always…You got me yet again, Hugh 🙂
That’s what I like to hear, Carol. 😀
Hugh, I loved this the first time I read it. Reading it again on the Senior Salon was a real treat!
You’re welcome, and I’m so pleased you came back to read it. Thank you so much.
Well done, Hugh. As always! I see you’re starting your next book, “Extra Glimpses” already. 🙂
Yes, it has its beginnings, Liesbet.
Wow. Didn’t see that one coming, Hugh. Nice and dark!
Thank you, Teri. Music to my ears. 😀
Loved it! Seems the little girl left one ‘hell’ of a world for another, lol. ❤
In today’s world, very true, Debby.
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Just sayin’. 🙂 ❤
Twisty-wisty, Hugh! Love it. The bad seed returns home!
Indeed, Terri. We never know where that bad seed can turn up.
“I always wanted to meet the devil.”
Love it 🙂
Thank you, Aimer.
Great story and I was shocked at the ending! Really enjoyed this one too! Thanks for sharing!
Glad you enjoyed it, Debbie. Thanks so much for reading it.
You had me hooked, but i did have to shut my eyes a bit .
lol, I hope they weren’t closed for long.
A great twist, Hugh. And a great response to Diana’s prompt.
Thanks, Rob. The images Diana has posted for each prompt have all been very inspiring to me.
I don’t usually take challenges because my concentration is impaired. This isn’t the case with the images Diana selects. It’s gratifying to be able to participate in challenges like these.
I really enjoy taking up challenges, Rob. However, I don’t always have the time to participate in them. And, sometimes, they really stump me.
I have an ongoing problem with concentration so when have it I focus on pending work which usually rules out challenges.
I love those little twists, especially when I don’t see them coming. Very well done, Hugh.
Thanks, George. Glad you never saw those twists coming.
At least I’m not alone in having been caught off-guard for that ending. Nicely done, Hugh.
Thank you, Dan.
Wow, Hugh. That ending really hit home. Thought-provoking take.
Thank you, Erika. I wasn’t very sure about this piece of flash fiction, but the comments say otherwise.
I know what you mean. It is makes you think a lot but only because it is so well written with that twist. It shall go deep and it does!
Thanks so much, Erika.
You are very welcome😁
Very clever twist, Hugh.
Thank you. I enjoy my twists, Robbie. 😀
Very powerful…with a completely unexpected ending!
Thanks, Donna.
Really good!!
Thank you, Sam.
Didn’t expect that twist. Great story, Hugh.
Thanks, Gwen. I like it when people don’t guess my endings.
That was FUN!!! Thank you!
You’re welcome.
Nice one, High. I didn’t expect that ending.
Music to my ears, thanks, John.
Oooh. This gave me the shivers, Hugh. I was delighted to see your link show up this morning. What a great tale with twists and twists until coming to the final one. So interesting that the Devil was unsure if he wanted the girl. Cool story. I’ll get it lined up to share. 🙂
When I realised the closing date was closing fast, Diana, I had to get the story out of my draft folder before it got lost. I dread to think what the Devil would have done to me if I’d forgotten to publish his version. 😈
Heh heh. You made it in plenty of time, Hugh. Safe from old Satan for another month. Lol.
Phew! I’ll hold you to that. 😀
What a great take Hugh!
Thanks, Ritu. Glad you enjoyed it.
Well that’s a turn up for books 💜
I’m glad to hear it. And there was me thinking that Hell was underneath us.
Above and below and around us Hugh…one false stop , one wrong turn 😖
Love this Hugh!
Thank you so much.
wow! Well, that was a twist I didn’t expect! 🙂 Well done, Hugh!
Thanks, Penny. Your words are music to my ears.