Sacha Black challenges us to write something using the word ‘choke’ using just 52 words (no more, no less).
Choke – by Hugh W. Roberts
Olive Mackeson had died choking on a cheese and sweet pickle sandwich, shortly after pulling out the choke on the dashboard of her car, as her foot slipped off the clutch, forcing the car into the path of an oncoming truck.
Registration number of the car – K, one, one, L, M, E
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I’m not sure what the choke of the car is, but here where I live you can get a traffic ticket for eating while driving, so that what happened to poor Olive wouldn’t happen. Brilliant use of the prompt word.
Thanks, Vashti. The same here in the U.K. You can be prosecuted for eating while driving a car. Even if waiting for the lights to turn green and with your car at a standstill, you can be prosecuted if caught eating, reading, or holding a mobile phone.
Very clever! Hi, I’m Kate and I’m coming from a blog party at which your blog was recommended by DG Kaye as a good one to check out! Nice job on the prompt. Do you get bonus points for using “choke” twice? 🙂
Hi, Kate. Thanks so much for coming over from the Blog party you were at. I’ll certainly thank Debby for recommending my blog.
I’m not so sure about getting any bonus points for using two different variations of the prompt word but I enjoyed doing the challenge. The vehicle choke was the first thing I thought about when I saw the prompt.
Brilliant Hugh. You’ve managed to use the prompt twice with 2 different meanings too. And love that licence plate! 🙂 ❤
Thanks, Debby. The choke in a vehicle was the first thing that came to me when I saw the prompt word, so I wanted to use it. Then I threw in the other ‘choke’ at the beginning. I’ve a true story about that licence plate. I will tell you about it when I see you at the Bash. 😀
Loved how you did this, Hugh. K11LME was quite a chuckle. You would have to do that to get me to eat a pickle and cheese sandwich. Great story.
Thank you. That licence plate is a true story. I encountered it many years ago. The memory of it came back to me when I first saw the prompt word for this challenge.
Someone had a dark sense of humor. 🙂
HAHAHAHAH I had to re-read the number plate a couple times but when I got it I laughed out loud. Brilliant.
Thanks. That number plate did once exist and I’ve come into contact with it.
No way?! That’s amazing!
Does it make me morbid that my first response to this story was to laugh out loud? Great response, Hugh 🙂
Not at all, Helen. I’m guessing it was the cheese and pickle sandwich that made you laugh? 😀 Although, I do love them.
I think it was the license plate number too haha 😀
And Branston Pickle, I presume?
Of course. I wouldn’t have any other version. 😀
Bring out the Branston.
Every time! 🙂
I remember my sister’s Mini had a choke!
Great story Hugh with a chilling tone to it! 🙂
Thanks, Judy. The choke in a vehicle was the first thing that came to me when I saw the prompt word.
Well it was very cleverly written as always, Hugh 🙂
The registration, K11 etc. Very clever !! That’s what you might call a mistake in selecting vanity plates.
Thanks, Van. I was a Transport Manager for 23 years and one of the cars came with that very registration plate. We had to get the plate changed as nobody would drive the vehicle.
Of course they wouldn’t. Wow.
Very good response to this prompt, Hugh. I love cheese and pickle sandwiches, pity to die before finishing it…
Cheese and pickle are also one of my favourites, Robbie. We even some cheese and pickle flavoured crisps. 😋
Poor Olive… If the cheese & pickle didn’t kill her, the truck would. 😉 I think you should get bonus points for using “choke” twice. Mega hugs
Thanks, Tegan. I’m not so sure if the bonus points will apply, but I certainly wanted to use both versions of the word in the flash fiction. In fact, it was the choke of the car that first came to me when I read the prompt.
Hugs to you.
Nice use of the word prompt! Although I can’t imagine what Olive was being a bit over ambitious- eating, pulling the choke and keeping her foot on the clutch all at the same time. I’ve never had a cheese and sweet pickle sandwich either- I’m intrigued. 🙂
Cheese and pickle are a favourite combination of sandwich filling over here in the UK, Kat. They go very well together. I had to add the word ‘sweet’ in, as I only had 51 words.
I definitely need to look into this “new” combination.
Oh my!!! Hugh… this is scary… considering what I went through yesterday…
Not sure if it was a gust of wind or a tyre blow out but I was in the fast lane doing 70 mph and the car suddenly veered towards the central reservation and I couldn’t turn it back. Hit the barrier, spun around. hit it again then spun off into the middle of the road. The scariest thing to happen to me..
What a terrifying experience, Ritu. I do hope you are all OK? Was it just you in the car? I can’t imagine how scared I would have been had it been me in a car when that happened. I hope you’re taking it easy today? Take care of yourself. Virtual hugs on the way to you. xx
It was just me Hugh yes. But I’m. OK. Shaken up but ok. Thank you 💜
I’m very glad to hear there were no injuries. Ritu. Now, take it easy and make sure you look after yourself. 💛
Thank you. I’m currently at home lounging… but in pain!
I’m glad to hear you’re taking it easy, Ritu. I hope the pain soon eases. Will Maltesers help?
Malteasers always help!… wonder if they’re available on prescription?? 😉
You are very clever!!
Thanks, Darlene. It was another tough prompt word to use from Sacha. When I read what it was, I immediately remembered how my father used the choke in our car back when I was a young child. I was surprised to find that some vehicles still have them.
That´s true, dad used one in the farm truck we had. I haven´t seen one in ages. Perfect for the story.