June 27, 2023, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story responding to “We’ve received your complaint.” Who has received the complaint and why? How was the complaint delivered — with grace, humour, vitriol? Go where the prompt leads! See June 27: Story Challenge in 99-words for more details.

An Unexpected Response – by Hugh W. Roberts

“We’ve received your complaint,” the email whispered through the screen.

Sarah’s blood ran cold. How did they know? She had never told a soul about the scratching sounds that echoed from her attic at night.

The email continued, “We apologise for the disturbance caused by our spectral resident. Rest assured; our exorcist team will investigate the paranormal activity.”

Dread clutched Sarah’s heart. She’d never have expected a reply, let alone a promise to banish the unseen entity.

The attic door creaked open as she stared at her inbox, revealing a shadowy figure.

Her complaint had caught the ghost’s attention.


Written for the 99-word flash fiction challenge hosted by Charli Mills at the Carrot Ranch.

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33 responses to “Flash Fiction Friday – An Unexpected Response”

  1. Colleen M. Chesebro avatar

    Hugh, this was so good. I love the way you created suspense. The last line was chilling. Excellent piece.

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      I’m glad you thought so. Thanks, Colleen.

      1. Colleen M. Chesebro avatar

        You’re welcome, Hugh.

  2. willowdot21 avatar

    Excellent Hugh, both stories 💜💜

      1. willowdot21 avatar

        A pleasure Hugh 💜💜

  3. Terri Webster Schrandt avatar

    Now this is creepy, Hugh! Mind-reading spirits–we are doomed! I’ve been slowly watching the Netflix series Supernatural of late. I can’t watch it every day–pretty intense. But the spirits the guys encounter are scary!

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      I remember a TV show called Supernatural, Terri. Is it the same series on Netflix? It was made about 20 years ago I think. It was about two brothers who investigated paranormal activity. I enjoyed watching it, so may give it another go.

      1. Terri Webster Schrandt avatar

        That’s the show! It’s a little dark so I prefer to watch earlier in the evenings 😁

  4. Norah avatar

    Very scary, Hugh.

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      Glad you thought so. Thanks, Norah.

  5. dgkaye avatar

    Perfectly eerie with your signature ending Hugh. :)

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      I’m glad you think so, thanks, Debby.

  6. Abhishek Kumar avatar
    Abhishek Kumar

    Your ability to evoke emotions and create a haunting atmosphere is commendable. I was thoroughly engaged throughout the entire story. Well done! 🙂

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      Thank you very much for great feedback on this piece of flash fiction. I’m glad you enjoyed it.

  7. TanGental avatar

    It must be dark inside that head of yours

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      Or, as is often the case, the lights are in but nobody is at home.

  8. Danny Watts avatar

    I agree with Erika, sounds like the beginning of something.

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      Thanks, Danny. These pieces of flash often beg for more, but I like allowing the reader to decide what happened next.

  9. Brenda avatar

    I agree with Erika. You’ve left us hanging here Hugh.

    I did love this spooky story Hugh. An interesting take on a complaint … which reminds me, I need to write a complaint when I get home

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      Thanks, Brenda. Sometimes, these short pieces of flash want more attention, but I like to leave them as they are and allow the reader to imagine the story further.

      1. Brenda avatar

        I understand Hugh. You need to draw the line somewhere

        1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

          Exactly. Cheers, Brenda.

  10. Erika avatar

    Hugh that calls loudly for a sequel!!!

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      Nooooooo! Don’t say that, Erika. These flash pieces are meant to be all on their own, although it can depend on next week’s prompt.

      1. Erika avatar

        I know, it is not meant to become a series… but I so wonder… lol. I hope next week’s prompt supports a sequel 😇

        1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

          Well, I’m glad you thought it was worth a sequel, Erika. Thank you.

  11. noelleg44 avatar

    I do hope this is a friendly ghost!

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      Somehow, I don’t think so, especially given Sarah was thinking of complaining about his/her presence.

  12. Dan Antion avatar

    Well done. Be careful what you wish for.

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      Exactly, Dan. Even thinking a wish has its dangers.

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