May 2, 2022, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about extraction. What is being extracted, and from where? Is it an idea? How does genre change the perspective (sci-fi versus romance)? Go where the prompt leads! Click here for details.
Evicted – by Hugh W. Roberts
They’d never wanted to move home. But the time had come.
If the landlord had only looked after the maintenance a little more, they wouldn’t have found themselves homeless.
On the day they were evicted, they’d all clung on for dear life. They hadn’t expected the maintenance to be so bad. Luckily some friends close by took them in.
“It won’t take long, Mrs Knowls. You’re doing very well,” said a rather plump lady dressed in a white coat. “That tooth is severely infected with bacteria who’ve made it their home. I’m about to extract them and their residence.”
Written for the 99-word flash fiction challenge hosted by Charli Mills at the Carrot Ranch.
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33 thoughts on “Flash Fiction Friday – Evicted”
Tooth abscess… ugh! Bacteria… double ugh! You almost had me feeling sorry the little bacteria but not quite. I’m gonna go floss now.
Glad you enjoyed it, Michael. I had a lot of fun writing this story.
Hahaha Hugh! What a twist … and it’s reminded me that I have to make an appointment 😆
I’m glad it acted as a reminder. I hope the dentist gives you a clean bill of health.
Ha! Sometimes the tooth hurts!😉
Nice twist at the end…extracted a chuckle from me!
Good to hear. Thanks, Liz.
Very clever Hugh. I love it! 😆
Very good, Hugh. I thought about a dental extraction, and did, but in a different way.
Great minds (and all that), Norah. When I first read Charli’s prompt, ‘teeth’ came straight to mind.
Your post is in my inbox. I look forward to reading it.
Perhaps we both have some memorable visits to the dentist. 😉
With us being from the same era, I’m sure our stories of visits to the dentist would be similar, Norah.
Very nicely done Hugh.
Putting a personality on nasty bacteria . . . ?
What a cool 💡 idea.
Thanks, Gary. I had fun with this prompt. ‘Teeth’ were the first thing I thought of when I saw the prompt word.
Saying farewell to resident bacteria can be a painful ordeal. Loved this. Great take!
It can. Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed it. It was a fun prompt.
LOL! Good riddance and Goodbye 🙂
Exactly, but they’re still in there doing damage.
Dr. Maintenance, hey? Very clever as usual!
This is hilarious, Hugh! Happy Friday!
Thank you, Terri. Happy Friday.
Ah! Well done you.
Hugh, a good one! A turn to teeth was a great twist! 📚🎶 Christine
Thanks, Christine. Glad you thought so. ‘Teeth’ were the first thing I thought about when reading the prompt.
My story was quite similar but it was from my perspective, not the bacteria 😛
Great minds think alike.
Brilliant, Hugh! 🙂
Thanks, Liesbet. Glad you enjoyed it.