January 9, 2019, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story about a carried wife. Why is she being carried? Who is carrying? Pick a genre if you’d like and craft a memorable character. Go where the prompt leads!


While carrying his new wife over the threshold of the honeymoon suite, Doug’s eyes lit up at the size of the massive bed in front of him.

Those pillows were big enough to suffocate his new wife for cheating on him.

***

Landing on the bed, Sophie looked at her new husband and wondered how long it would be before the spiked drink she had made Doug consume, would knock him out cold so she could spend the night with Mike, Doug’s best friend.

***

Two floors below, Mike wondered which of the newlyweds would be joining him in bed tonight.


Written in response to the 99-word flash fiction challenge hosted by Charli Mills at the Carrot Ranch.

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90 responses to “Honeymoon #flashfiction”

  1. D. Avery @shiftnshake avatar

    Ha! Well done! That’s a Mike drop, of sorts.

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      I like what you say. From some of the other comments, I think you could be right.

  2. willowdot21 avatar

    I do love this Hugh, I wouldn’t worry about Mike, Hugh he had a tasty time with the waiter and waitress who bought him his late night snack. 😜💜

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      Good to see you carrying on the story, Willow. Whatever Mike got up to, I wonder if an awful shock awaits him?

      1. willowdot21 avatar

        Well we all know life never runs smoothly, especially when we are having fun. It usually sneaks up and bites you on the bum ! 🥴😁😁

  3. Timoteophillips avatar
    Timoteophillips

    Hugh, this is brilliant: not just the usual story of marital affairs and deceit but with an interesting twist. Great thinking outside of the box………or is that bed?

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      Thanks, Tim. My editor taught me to think outside of the box. Her advice seems to have stuck with me.

  4. Terri Webster Schrandt avatar

    Oh this was fun, Hugh! Short and not so sweet!!

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      Thanks, Terri. A bit like a bowl of salty and sweet popcorn mix then?

  5. Clive avatar

    Superb, Hugh, though I hate to think what life experience brought that lot into your mind 😂

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      Now, that would be telling, wouldn’t it, Clive?

      1. Clive avatar

        Aww, go on 😂

  6. Jacquie Biggar avatar
  7. Erika Kind avatar

    This is just too awesome, Hugh 😂 🤣

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      Thank you. I’ve no idea where it came from. When I saw the prompt, I thought ‘no-way are you going to write a 99-word piece of flash fiction with that prompt, Hugh.’

      1. Erika Kind avatar

        Haha, you did awesome. I read a few takes, all good, but your take is the absolute winner for me. So smart!!

        1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

          So kind. Thank you, Erika. That’s made my day.

          1. Erika Kind avatar

            I am very happy to hear that😊

  8. Ritu avatar

    Ooer! Definitely a long wait!

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      And he has to check-out of the hotel in the morning. Hopefully, before they discover the bodies of the newlyweds.

      1. Ritu avatar

        Ooooh! Implications!!!

  9. Aimer Boyz avatar
    Aimer Boyz

    Dark with a capital D, but funny … :)

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      I’m glad the humour of the situation has also come over in the story.

  10. Janis @ RetirementallyChallenged.com avatar

    Good one, Hugh! Each part held a dark surprise.

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      Indeed, Janis. Mike has a long wait ahead of him.

  11. floridaborne avatar

    That was great! Dark humor at its finest. :-)

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Only being allowed 99 words (no more, no less) is tough, so I’m happy the story came over.

      1. floridaborne avatar

        The punch line was delightfully unexpected.

  12. Priscilla Bettis avatar
    Priscilla Bettis

    OMGosh, that’s funny-scary. I didn’t see where it was going. Good little story!

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      Thank you, Priscilla. It always pleases me when a reader didn’t see the ending coming.

  13. robertawrites235681907 avatar

    Oh my, this is not a good start to a marriage, Hugh.

    1. Hugh's Views and News avatar

      It’s a marriage that has probably already ended, Robbie. Mike has a long wait ahead of him.

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