April 11, 2022, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story using the phrase, water falls. Where is the water coming from? How does it shape a story? Who does it involve? Go where the prompt leads! Click here for details.


Eyes Of The Waterfall – by Hugh W. Roberts

Water flowed from the bottom to the top, yet everybody else told Miranda it flowed from top to bottom.

“Not true,” Miranda shouted as she snatched her hand away from her mother’s grip and strode across the shallow pool through the crystal-clear waterfall.

“Miranda! “Come back now!” screamed her mother while watching her daughter get soaked.

Looking through the waterfall at her mother, Miranda noticed it flowed from top to bottom, but the strange, terrifying creatures looking back at her from the other side of the waterfall petrified her more.

Only when the waterfall stopped did Miranda’s nightmares begin.

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Written for the 99-word flash fiction challenge hosted by Charli Mills at the Carrot Ranch.

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22 responses to “Flash Fiction Friday – Eyes Of The Waterfall”

  1. Michael B. Fishman avatar

    A twisty, creepy little piece of horrific flash. I hope Miranda can stay on her side of the waterfall.

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      I’ve a feeling she’ll have to leave. Maybe there is a way out through the back of the cave she’s in?

  2. Liz H avatar

    Delightfully creepy! Nice work, Hugh!

  3. Colleen Chesebro: WordCraftPoetry avatar

    Hugh, this is definitely creepy! I’m on my computer so I shouldn’t have any more flub-up with thick thumbs on my phone. LOL! <3

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      I’m glad you think it’s creepy, Colleen. A short sci-fi horror piece from me.

      1. Colleen Chesebro: WordCraftPoetry avatar

        It’s those endings that make these short pieces shine. 💜

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  5. Liesbet @ Roaming About avatar

    Oh no! I love swimming up to waterfalls and trying to “float” underneath them or walk behind them. It’s exhilarating. Luckily, I’ve never met any scary creatures there.

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      You’ve probably met some of those scary creatures, Liesbet. It’s just a matter of looking through the right waterfalls.

  6. dgkaye avatar

    Now there you gone taking a beautiful waterfall story and ending it scary, lol. Good fun! <3

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      A typical Hugh story, then?

      1. dgkaye avatar

        Absolutely!!! :)

  7. Terri Webster Schrandt avatar

    Those darn waterfalls! Sometimes it’s best not to know too much, Hugh. Great story!

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      Thank you, Terri. Who’d ever have thought that looking through a waterfall revealed the truth?

  8. D. Wallace Peach avatar

    I love waterfalls, but not the kind that flow the wrong way. Fun story, Hugh. :-D

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      Thanks, Diana. Glad you enjoyed it.

  9. JT Twissel avatar

    I try to avoid waterfalls with eyes!

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      The problem is that you don’t know which ones have eyes until you’re on the other side of the waterfall.

  10. Dan Antion avatar

    Yikes! I’m glad I read this in the morning and not right before bed. Well done, Hugh.

    1. Hugh W. Roberts avatar

      I’m glad you saw the ‘creepiness’ in this short piece of flash, Dan.

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