This is the final part of chapter one from ‘Tales From Under The Rainbow’, a book I started writing in 2012.
An update on Part 8
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What is Tales From Under The Rainbow?
‘Tales From Under The Rainbow’ follows the adventures of Danny Johnson. Set in 1986, Danny is about to face life-changing events when he travels to live and work in London.
Here are the final 502 words of chapter one. It continues on the coach journey to London with Danny. We get to know some more about two new characters (one of which will become a major character) which we had a brief glimpse of last week.
Not really interested in what Jane had to say, Danny tried to look attentive.
“Don’t worry, it’ll only take a few minutes,” she laughed. “A few minutes to take away the coach sickness I suffer with.”
Fumbling around the plastic carrier bag again, she produced another bar of chocolate and offered it to Danny.
“Fruit and nut? That’s my favourite. How did you know?”
“Oh, good. You and I are going to get on so well,” replied Jane as she extended her hand to Danny. “Did I introduce myself?”
“Yes, you did,” answered Danny, leaning across and hardly able to reach her outstretched hand.
“How nice,” came a female voice from the seats in front of Danny. Jane and Danny looked towards the voice. “Looks like this coach could be the ‘love coach’, Jack,” giggled the woman at the man beside her.
Raising his eyebrows, Danny responded.
“The Love coach?” he blurted out. If only you knew that I’d probably rather sleep with your husband than Jane, he thought.
Smiling, Danny thought it funny how she thought he was straight. Not a bad thing when faced with some situations, but not this one. She obviously had no idea, but then probably neither did most of the passengers on the coach.
“We’re celebrating our ruby wedding anniversary,” announced the woman as she held up a greetings card with the words ‘To my beautiful wife’ on the front. It immediately answered some of the questions Danny had about the couple.
“This is my husband, Jack,” declared the woman as she looked down at the man next to her. “Stand up, Jack and introduce yourself to the young couple.”
“Do I have to, Gwen? Leave them alone,” came a muffled voice.
“Yes, you do! Stand up and say hello.”
Watching, Danny saw a rather rugged and handsome man stand up. Despite his age and signs of grey hair, Jack’s moustache showed no signs of ageing. Had he taken more notice of the couple on his way to his seat, he’d probably had tried making eye contact with Jack. He’d done it before, often with much success, and had always preferred older men.
Gwen, on the other hand, looked much older than her husband, with a typical blue-rinse hairstyle and a face covered with crow’s feet from too much sun. The light-blue dress meant for women far younger than her was nice, but it was the string of pearls and matching earrings that made her look more her age.
“Nice to meet you,” said Jack, before quickly sitting down again.
“He’s a little shy,” laughed Gwen. You’d never have guessed that he’s usually the life and soul of the party.”
Trying not to laugh, Danny and Jane looked at each other before offering Gwen some chocolate.
For the next six hours, some of the passengers on the coach got to know each other, while others slept or kept to themselves. New chapters were about to begin in all their lives, some of which would be life-changing.
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