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‘Tales From Over The Rainbow‘ is a novel in the making. These are the next 512 words. The story continues from where we left it in part 1. Today we’ll meet a new major character, Dougie Marsh.
Today, life was giving Danny a day he would never forget. It would be the day that changed everything. It would ensure his path of life crossed the paths of many other travellers all on their journeys through time.
What lay ahead for Danny was something he had often dreamt about ever since the first time he’d stepped off the train at Paddington station. Seven years earlier had been his first trip to London. It was the beginning of the romance he’d have with the city for the rest of his life.
Climbing the three steps to board the coach in Middlesborough station, Danny came face to face with the driver whom he acknowledged with a smile.
“Ticket please”, demanded the driver with a cheeky smile.
Blushing, Danny placed his bag on the floor. Thinking how ridiculous he must seem to all the other passengers, he fumbled around for his ticket. Although he disliked large groups of people starring at him, he always craved being the centre of attention.
He remembered how exiting he’d felt the day he’d purchased the ticket to London. The prospect of starting a new chapter in his life had stayed with him right up until this moment. Now, however, doubt was setting in. Was he doing the right thing by moving to London?
“Sorry,” announced Danny, looking up and noticing the badge on the driver’s shirt. ‘Dougie Marsh.’
“No problem,” responded Dougie. “Take your time. It looks as if you’re off on a mighty adventure.”
“Yes, I suppose I am,” replied Danny, hoping that the other passengers could not overhear the conversation. “I’ve lived here for six years and have decided to go through the new door life opened for me.”
“Oh come on, driver,” shouted a voice from the far end of the coach, “I kinda need to get to London today, not next week! Stop flirting with the cute guy and get on with getting us all there.”
Blushing again, Danny wondered if Dougie Marsh was flirting with him. Surely not? Anyway, even if he was, he wasn’t Danny’s type.
“Ah, here it is,” announced a delighted Danny, pulling the ticket from the inside of his wallet. “I’ve hardly let this ticket out of my sight since I purchased it. It’s become as important as having a best friend.” Handing the ticket to Dougie, he noticed how small Dougie’s hand was and how bitten down his nails were. Maybe he was an ex-smoker who had just quit or perhaps he was going through a tense time in his life?
“A best friend?” commented Dougie. “You must be on one significant journey.”
A loud cough from the back of the coach interrupted the conversation. The young man who had earlier accused Dougie of flirting looked Danny directly in the eye. It was a piercing look, one that without saying anything, Danny knew what action to take.
Picking up his bag, Danny made his way down the coach not realising the eyes of the driver were admiring a perfect backside in the rearview mirror of the coach.
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