March 26, 2020, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story in which a character takes charge. Who is this character, and what situation calls for their action? It can be playful or serious, fantastical, or realistic. Go where the prompt leads!
“A gun? Who’s got a gun?” murmured Doug, as he tried to take control of his body which felt like a block of concrete. “And where’s Sophie?”
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Two floors below, Sophie’s eyes moved from the twitching nose of the rabbit to the back of the mysterious woman’s head. “You’re not as in control as you think you are, Sophie,” giggled the woman.
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Forced to close his eyes, to protect them from the paint dust, the tapping noise Mike heard suddenly stopped. Opening his eyes slowly, he was stunned to see the face of a woman looking down at him.
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Written in response to the 99-word flash fiction challenge hosted by Charli Mills at the Carrot Ranch.
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Your stories beginning to remind me of another with a rabbit — a white rabbit.
I never thought about that. The rabbit has taken a bit of a backseat recently. I wonder if it’ll make a return?
I wonder. He did disappear for a while in the other story too, didn’t he?
Yes, he did. Maybe that’s a good sign?
I’m sure it is.
I feel a connection coming on! Keep following (you have us all rivited like tuning into a radio serial.).
Yes, I think that connection is forming rather nicely, Charli.
Ha! That rabbit haunts a few flashes yet. Seriously, will this ever end? Maybe no story really does. Consider this: the cinematography. How will this be shot when it is made into a film?
Oh, it will undoubtedly end, but as actress Judy Dench once said: “there is no such thing as an ending, it’s just the part where you leave the story.”
I thought of writing scripts but never attempted it. I did hear that screenwriters write scripts precisely the same way as if they were viewing the story on a screen. I’m not sure the three-points-of-view in this story would work on-screen unless they were extended by more than the 33-words I’m allowed for each character per episode. I’m sure a good director would sort it out. And oh! How I wish one of my stories was made into a film. That would be a dream come true.
A true Hugh mystery. Wonder how far you can take this! 🙂 x
I’ve no idea, Debby. Part of me wants the story to end soon, while another part of me is saying ‘carry on.’ I hope I can bring the story to a satisfactory end that readers enjoy. We will see.
I have every faith! 🙂
Oh sorry, I’ve missed these, but look forward to reading the full document 🙂
No worries, Sam. It’ll be a ‘pages’ document, but I’ll add a link to the latest episode from the story as soon as it’s ready. I’m only allowed 99-words each episode but am already nearing 1500 words for the whole story.
I wonder about the ending too. Does anyone know??
I don’t think anyone does, Donna. Certainly not me, anyway. Last week, I thought I saw the ending coming, but now I’m not so sure. How long will it go on? Who knows?
You still got this, Hugh! 🙂 This week’s prompt appears a bit easier than last week’s!
I’m wasn’t so sure, Liesbet. I thought at first that it was going to be easy, but despite doing all I could, I still could not write in anything about ‘being in charge’ for Mike’s part of the story. Still, I got the other two…I think. I’m happy how it turned out. Now I can’t wait to hear what this week’s prompt will be.
I really like this story and look forward to reading more of it.
Thanks, Susan. I have the story in one document now. I’ll be publishing it on my blog soon so readers can read it in one place.
I really wonder where this is heading to…
So do I, Erika. I’m surprised by its direction at the end of every episode.